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White Horn

Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2016 2:53 pm
by Pokemonaces
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Well this is certainly a pretty looking one, and four legged type, haven't seen those in awhile

Re: White Horn

Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2016 3:17 pm
by Pierce
Now she would be fun to play non-lethal deer hunting. Chances are she'd probably hunt the hunter instead during mating season.

Re: White Horn

Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2016 4:42 pm
by Vendettadabeast
She's probably a pro at Reindeer games

Re: White Horn

Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2016 7:10 pm
by Albren
Absolutely beautiful. But alas, I know nothing of this monster's actual lore. Anyone more knowledgeable than myself interested in enlightening me?

Colour Blind Bambi

Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2016 7:20 pm
by Kaijin
For someone having "white" in her name... She's not precisely white.
Such a huge miss just right off the bat there... I pretty much expected her fur to be actually WHITE... If you're gonna create a critter based on a white stag (which is recurring critter in more than one lore... and even Christianity), at the very least... I don't know... MAKE IT WHITE.

White stags are white for a reason: white symbolizes purity (and in case of Celtic mythology also symbolizes the otherworld), making a white stag in a colour that is not white is as much of a sacrilege as making a unicorn that is not white... maybe even more (and yeah... I know she has white hair... but what should be white is her fur to begin with...).

I kinda hope that she gets some redemption with an accurate and/or well thought description/setting introduction... But I doubt it... since he already managed to botch up the most basic part of her (heck... She's closer to a Wow Dryad than to a white stag).

Re: White Horn

Posted: Sun Oct 09, 2016 10:04 pm
by Feathers
Easily my favorite design of the taur family.

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 9:36 am
by Pokemonaces
Thanks to fur man for the heads up, translations up people :p

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 12:09 pm
by DogKama
Honestly that last bit about the heat of her vagina blowing the heat of her mouth of the water really made me laugh.

Blazing hot failure

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 1:24 pm
by Kaijin
Let's check out something first:

Whitehorn -> She's not white
Whitehorn -> She doesn't have horns (those are antlers)
Centaur Family -> She's based after a (female) reindeer.
Half Horse Body -> Horses and deers are not even related (I could understand that between a cow and a gazelle...as they're actually related...But this?)

Wow...The failure is strong on this one. ^^U
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Well... For starters the first thing it comes to mind is that is a relief that she's not based after any incarnation of the white stag, he probably chose the name because it sounded "cool".

As for the profile itself I can only say two things:

1) She and Millia Rage buy their clothes at same store.

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That's quite a "Khorosho" look

2) She can be summed up in just two words: QUADRUPEDE YETI

I guess she could be okay-ish (I mean... if you like Yetis, you can't come to dislike her...), but I can't take this one seriously... She's just...way too shoddy...

.P.S.: Someone should tell Kenkou that not all tauric creatures are centaurs (if he wanted a brand new centaur, there were hundreds of accurate choices out there...).
.P.S.II.: I guess this one will also have two vaginas then huh...

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 2:06 pm
by Feathers
Doesn't sound all that bad to be honest, first profile I've read (and mostly enjoyed) in years. The writing really needs some proofreading though, I saw several mistakes just skimming. Will read more later when I get extra time.

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 2:25 pm
by Perentie
Feathers wrote:Doesn't sound all that bad to be honest, first profile I've read (and mostly enjoyed) in years. The writing really needs some proofreading though, I saw several mistakes just skimming. Will read more later when I get extra time.
It was proofread, but more advice is always welcome.

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My guess is that she is a centaur and stated to have a horse body because of how KC has defined the development of monster races in the setting. To quote World Guide 1:

In the explanations of monsters, the words “original race”, “sub-race”, etc. are sometimes used. “Original races” are the monsters that founded the races of monsters classified in families such as “○○ family”. For example, for the lamia family, it's “lamia (encyclopedia I -p. 60)”, for the slime family, it's “slime (encyclopedia I -p. 16) “, etc. Amongst all the monsters of ○○ family, the original race is the oldest race. It is supposed that most of the monsters belonging to ○○ family derived or evolved from the original race. They have the basic nature of monsters of ○○ family, and the original race is fundamentally supposed to be the most numerous of all monsters in the ○○ family. “sub-race” is a general term for monsters that derived or evolved from original races.

For example, medusa and echidna are regarded as sub-races of lamia, the original race. Sub-races are distinguished by having parts of their form and nature in common with the original species. If they have high abilities or special abilities compared to the original race, they are often described as “higher races”, but humans just call them that. With a few exceptions, the monsters themselves aren't aware of any kind of hierarchy based on that.


This also explains why "fish family" was more recently changed to "mermaid family" for the various mermaid monsters, as mermaids themselves would be the original race.

In the white horn's case, KC outright calls her a reindeer monster in his notes. But since she is meant to be an offshoot of the centaurs in-setting (why KC wouldn't make a separate family for deer taurs is another question, perhaps he just wants to keep things simpler), the profile says she has a horse body, and the basic implication is that she merely has adapted to look like a deer. Similarly her antlers could actually be permanent horns that merely look like antlers.

Course a lot of this is speculation, but its worth thinking about. Note that KC has gone to some lengths in the past to give things the correct terminology (i.e. referring to the neck fangs on the oomukade as maxillipeds), I can't help but think that referring to the antlers as horns was intentional.

And on a similar note, for those who are curious, its not that KC was unaware that the mucus toad looks more like what is usually called a frog, he used the name to give a stronger connection to Japanese RPG monsters that go by that name.

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 3:17 pm
by Kaijin
One thing is for sure: You definitely get an "A" for effort.
You tried harder trying to defend a lost cause than him actually trying to make sense with this entry.
If something's right is right, if something's wrong... then it's wrong (what a shocker), and this one got even the tiniest detail wrong.

Also...
In the white horn's case, KC outright calls her a reindeer monster in his notes. But since she is meant to be an offshoot of the centaurs in-setting (why KC wouldn't make a separate family for deer taurs is another question, perhaps he just wants to keep things simpler), the profile says she has a horse body, and the basic implication is that she merely has adapted to look like a deer. Similarly her antlers could actually be permanent horns that merely look like antlers.
Look, I know you're a good guy (or at least I want to believe that)... But seriously I would be eternally grateful if you stopped insulting my intelligence. I might be no genius... But I ain't no moron either you know.
The reason this entry is like this probably is probably due to sheer laziness and I'm sure even you know it (we're talking about a guy that referred to the kitsune entries as "wolves" for an eternity and half)

.P.S.: And before someone dares to say something like "she's like this because there are no horses in snow", then let me remind you something...

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...Lapland says "As if"

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 3:39 pm
by Perentie
Call me something of a devil's advocate, but I also like to give people the benefit of the doubt, especially when there is a language barrier and thus asking questions is difficult. 8-)

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 4:23 pm
by Feathers
Ah sure. I didn't read it all yet though, but these caught my eye or made it a harder to follow.
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Sex with them begins with an embrace so gentle and warm, that it is as if it alone could
restore a man whose body was frozen on a snow-covered road, and a kiss
so deep that it seems enough to melt each other's lips.

Seems like 2 sentences in one. "That it is as if it" is that a mouthful or what? I don't know, but for for me, it was! I'd of done something like "Sex with them begins with a warm and gentle embrace, which alone could restore a frozen man's body that was laying on a snow-covered road. Their kiss is so deep, that it feels as if it's enough to melt each other's lips." Again, just preference..everyone is different here. I'm just not the mouthful of words kind of guy.

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The heat of their vagina blows that of their mouth out of the water, and while penetration
will make a man feel like he's going to melt from the pleasure and heat;
the feeling of being enveloped and warmed up by a white horm's insides,
produces even greater pleasure than the physical stimulation of sex.

"The heat of their vagina blows that of their mouth out of the water, " what is this sentence trying to say? I'm confused. @_@ "Blows that of their mouth" Am I reading this wrong? I'm half asleep after all. I just don't get it. X_X

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Anyways, this entry is the best one in a while for me!

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 5:01 pm
by Kaijin
Perentie wrote:Call me something of a devil's advocate, but I also like to give people the benefit of the doubt, especially when there is a language barrier and thus asking questions is difficult. 8-)
More like when the one asked has stated multiple times that since you're not from his region, his content is not aimed at you and thus he doesn't care about what are your two cents about such a matter.

One thing is giving someone the benefit of the doubt, another completely different is turning a blind eye at anything someone does... But hey, who am I to argue... if that's what you fancy, then suit yourself.

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 5:10 pm
by Perentie
Feathers wrote:"The heat of their vagina blows that of their mouth out of the water, " what is this sentence trying to say? I'm confused. @_@ "Blows that of their mouth" Am I reading this wrong? I'm half asleep after all. I just don't get it. X_X
"Blows out of the water" is basically a way of saying "far exceeds" or "is much greater than." ;)

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 5:26 pm
by Feathers
No I understand that part. What I'm talking about is the "Blows that of their mouth" Blows that of their mouth? That's just not sounding right...

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 8:44 pm
by Pierce
I'll admit, the wording of it was so overly descriptive I interpreted it as "Queefing". But that's all I've to say on that.

And given the situation as body warmers. I get the impression her breasts would work perfectly as handwarmers in a raging blizzard.

Re: White Horn

Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2016 8:47 pm
by Perentie
Feathers wrote:No I understand that part. What I'm talking about is the "Blows that of their mouth" Blows that of their mouth? That's just not sounding right...
Oh I see, I think, the "that" refers to the heat and is only meant to make a comparison. I guess it does sound a bit awkward if one thinks about it, but its a type of phrasing I've heard before so I saw no need to change it.

Re: Blazing hot failure

Posted: Thu Oct 13, 2016 6:47 pm
by Albren
:what!?:

calm down man. She doesn't look like she's the "White Stag" and she does indeed have "White Horns"

And a lot of your criticisms don't have anything to do with the tea in china