The Monster Multiverse

Well, I just posted the newest chapter (Chapter 22). Finally, Shuu gets to have a much needed rest...well...sort of. Also, I get to introduce my story's Mary Sue character!

Hope you all like it!

Hmn, not bad but not great. If this were a visual novel I would say you just needed a rest of so many events and wrote a whole chapter with a hollow encounter with (yet) another NPC

Thanks for the critique.

I take it that you want the story to develop more rather than introduce new characters that screw Shuu. It's ok, I kinda feel the same way. I want to get right into the main part of the story, but that's kinda just how this story goes. After all, Reislynn is taking Shuu "bride shopping".

I think when I first started this story, its main premise was just to have a story where one guy gets to "meet" many different MGs. The story's plot was kinda a second priority. Don't worry though, there will be some major developments soon.

It's ok, it just happens that I once participate in an rp with the same story line (visiting the whole mge world and get to know all the mamono) and with each time we had to leave everything behind to keep traveling I felt the story was turning more and more hollow until I left it, we were just going into a new town get into the classic events of each mamono and leave them afterwards... I just feel it inhuman.
I just don't want your story to fall it the same hole

Yeah, I understand what you're saying. After all it was pretty inhuman to leave Ru and Re. I'm so sorry, lovely slime girls!!! Don't worry though...Shuu won't be getting away...I don't think it's possible to run from all those girls.

You know? If I were to go into the mge world I just hope to get trapped by an Alraune before I find any other girl. Otherwise I would equally fall in love with any of these lovely girls; hell, I even think I wouldn't mind becoming a dark elf's slave as long as she loves me back!

im whit axc but i would like a harem of 4 girls anubiz,holstauros ,lilim and Alraune

dragonstryke58 wrote:Well, I just posted the newest chapter (Chapter 22). Finally, Shuu gets to have a much needed rest...well...sort of. Also, I get to introduce my story's Mary Sue character!

Hope you all like it!

Mary Sue...... I get it the name is Mary Sue.... good one.

Not only does Shuu have a Horny Bunny but with this wife canidate he'll always have no promblem with sleep...

can't wait to see what happen's next.

Hey, what happened with Ru and Re??? I wanna know!!!

Sorry, with all kinds of stuff I've been having to do lately, I haven't had any time to write any new chapters. I'm hoping to write more soon.

well, that's a bit sad to hear, anyway, thanks for your answer, man.

So far i read up to chapter eight, and i must say..........I really like this. If i didn't have to work early in the mourning and i wasn't so busy working on my fics i would spend my whole night reading the rest of the chapters. (I will on my day off and break during writing)


I hope to see more,and i'm commenting now to follow the story and continue where i left off. Good job Dragonstryke.

Thanks. For now I have had to put the story on hold because of so many problems I've been having (medical, professional, etc.). Once I get all that out of the way I hope to continue.

Sorry to hear that, hopefully you get through what your going through. ell i at least get time to catch up before you continue.

Good luck man and don't worry about it will be here

Same here I know the feeling...

hope things get better for you...

Thanks everyone...most everything is out of the way. The only thing I have to get through is my busy work schedule. Because my department is down one person (and my boss is taking up new projects for us to do), I've been kind of swamped.

I feel very sorry for Re and Ru but the responses that you are getting is an indication that you are a good writer and that's what writers strive for. Looking to see more from you. May the Force be with you.

Is this going to continue, or is it safe to assume that it's dead...?

Sorry, the past few months have been really hectic with work, family, and personal issues. Once everything clears up, I will definitely start up again. The thing is that the nature of my family problems still looks like it won't be resolved anytime soon.